So Iphy wrote a story and needs your criticism.... :)..... It has no title yet.

So this is the story, this is like my first time of writing a story or anything of this sort so please be nice when criticizing.. :) or i might just cry.... lol

Juachi walked out of the firm’s revolving door, it was a hot day, Lagos seemed to be getting more and more overcrowded each day. Her phoned vibrated in her purse, she didn’t bother to look at the caller I.D, she knew it was her mother- this was the 6^th time her mother had called her that afternoon and she ignored all the calls. The vibration irritated her, but at least it was better than her loud “thief my kele” ring tone; she had to switch to silent mode because hearing the song over and over again due to her mother’s incessant calling had become a bit tiring. It kept vibrating in her purse, she reached for the phone, looked at the caller I.D: mum. Reject call. She didn’t have time for her mother’s complaints today. Juachi knew why her mother was calling, she had probably heard about her friend’s cousin, Toyin, Toyin was getting married, which was of course a good thing except for the fact that it would only remind Juachi’s mother to call her and ask her “when will it be our turn Juachi?’’ like all the other wedding news she heard had done. She felt the vibration again, this time the phone was in her hand, she gave up, if she didn’t answer this would go on all day knowing who her mother is. Answer call.

“Hello mum”

“So you are avoiding your mother ehn? Juachi?”

“Mum, you have called me six times in the past hour…. Is there a problem?”

“Why didn’t you answer my calls?”

“I have been busy with work mum, is there a problem?, I have to meet Lola for lunch in 10 minutes”

“So that’s why you have been avoiding my calls? Odi egwu!!... well we need to talk”

“I don’t………”

Her mother cut her off … “I heard Lola’s cousin is getting married, is that right?”

“Yes mum, two weekends from now”

“Isn’t she like 24?... At least she has her priorities straight”

Juachi knew where this was going … “mm hmm?”

“Juachi.. I don’t understand you sometimes, I thought we had talked about this marriage issue, If Tega is not serious about this relationship both of you have and doesn’t want to step up to the next level, then stop wasting your time, at your age you should be planning on settling down oh”

Juachi let out a huge sigh and got into her car... “Mum, this is not a good time; let me call you back tonight”

“We’ll talk about it now Juachi.. You are 26 years old for God’s sake, all you career women of nowadays, Is it when you reach the big 30 that you’ll realize that marriage should be a priority?”

“Mum, I said I’ll call you back! Sometimes you find some weird way to put me in a foul mood. Always talking about this marriage thing like I’m 40 and single, I am 26, I have a boyfriend, I am happy, I have a great career and if marriage happens to come along in the next few years then fine…but if not, when it happens it happens and trust me you’ll be the first to know, but as for now, I’m late for lunch, I’ll talk to you later. Ok?”

“I’m going to have to come down to Lagos, or you’d come down to Port Harcourt. You choose”

“Well, fine. When you come for Toyin’s wedding we’ll talk”, Juachi couldn’t hide the impatience and irritation from her voice anymore.

“Ok. See you then. Will ring you before then. Bye hunny!!!” Her mother sounded cheerful all of a sudden, Juachi knew that it had to do with her agreeing to have this “talk” with her mum when she visits. And she began to dread this visit.

End call.

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Juachi walked into the restaurant, this was where she, Lola and Crystal met three times a week for lunch. Sometimes they’d skip lunch and go to the salon to get their nails or hair done or just pamper themselves a little. It was an upscale restaurant Q. that was the name. One letter, Q. On the first day Juachi had laughed at the name, why would someone name their restaurant Q?... she thought. But Lola had convinced her that it was indeed a nice place and she needed to stop being picky about everything, such as restaurants that she disliked the names of. They had laughed about it and went in on the first day and ever since they had become regulars. A year later, she met Tega while she and the girls were at lunch; he had walked in looking very suave and confident and boy! Was he fine? Juachi had stared and stared and the girls had started teasing her about it. Tega had walked up to them and asked for Juachi’s number just out of the blue, she had refused at first but somehow he talked her into giving him her number and she gave him her business card instead and said in her businesslike manner “If you ever need advertising or PR services, call me”. And he did call, but not for PR, neither was it for advertising, from regular calls and texts to flowers delivered to her office and one or two outings and they had hit it off. It’s been two years since her and Tega met and she hasn’t been able to stop going to Q for lunch. It was where she met the most important/favorite person in her life and as crazy as it sounded somehow she felt liked she owed Q.

“Ok, so I should tell the dress lady that we want something green for the bridesmaids with gold detail?...... Got it!..... Will do…later then” Lola was just ending the call and at the same time signaling to a waiter with her hand as Juachi sat down by the table. She turned to Juachi … “This babe Na wa for you sha, so this is your 10 minutes ehn? I’ve been her for 25 minutes”

“Babes sorry jare, mumsi and her wahala again….plus this Lagos traffic. But wait oh, is it that everyday a thousand people move into Lagos? This traffic is becoming the devil!”

“haha…tell me about it. Anyways that was Toyin on the phone, she sends her love, she said we’ll need to pick up the dresses this Friday from the dress lady so the bridesmaids can try them on. So what time on Friday?”

“Can we do Monday? Have to go pick Tega up from the airport on Friday; he’s coming back from the business trip.”

“Ok. Don’t forget though. We really need to have them tested and re-sent for adjustment if need be by Tuesday”

“Cool. Were you the one that told my mumsi about Toyin’s wedding?”

“Yea. What happened? She can’t make it?”

“Because of you, my head is now on the chopping block. Today its “juachi why aren’t you married?” tomorrow its “Juachi, set you priorities straight”…. Now with this Toyin’s marriage she has opened the JUACHI-DOESN’T-WANT-TO –GET-MARRIED file and she is bothering me”

“Hahaha…. Sorry oh Jae-jae, I thought she had stopped the whole marriage talk?”

“Hmm…. Talking as if u don’t know my mumsi again…haha…I’m going to need a little more luck to get out of this one”

The waiter came and asked for their orders.

“The usual” Juachi said as Lola nodded to the same order. Later on Crystal joined them and they had their usual lunch time routine, talking about their jobs, relationships, laughing about the silliest things and giving each other the 411 on all the details of friends, foes and family, occasionally bringing up recent topics like Toyin’s wedding and Crystals breakup and how they all needed a vacation of some sort to regain the sanity in their lives until lunch time was over and they each headed back to work.

Friday couldn’t come any sooner for Juachi; she terribly missed Tega. He had been away for close to four weeks on his Canadian business trip. Quite frankly, the only thing she liked about those trips were the numerous gifts he always brought back- if there was someone who knew how to pamper Juachi, it was Tega- and of course the “return lovemaking” as she called it. It was a regular activity for them since he started going on his business trips, she would miss him, when it was time for him to come back she would pick him up from the airport, they’d go to his house, he’d shower her with gifts, they’d make passionate, intense love and cuddle all through the night and she’d spend about 2-3 days in his house before going back to her flat.

As much as she loved the gifts and “return lovemaking” she was tired of him traveling all the time, she had gotten so addicted to Tega and being away from him was just too much for her to handle.

After work on Friday she stopped at the wine shop and bought two bottles of red wine, she wasn’t a wine person so she didn’t spend long minute at the shop comparing wines and trying to decide which to buy based on their age, finesse and all what not, that was Tega’s thing. She was a beer girl and she really didn’t care whether the wine was “ribena” in a glass bottle with a red wine label on it, all she cared about was that it had alcohol, it was red, it was wine and they would drink it tonight. Tega had always teased her about her preference for beer over wine, beer was a “mans thing” he had said, and then she had teased him about being a sissy for not being able to handle the taste of real, good beer.

As she drove to the airport she was shaking with excitement like a little girl at a candy store. She missed the smell of his Armani code perfume and his big, strong arms wrapped around her. She sang a bit more loudly along to the Aretha Franklin song playing in her car, and drove a bit faster, and even when the bus driver at Oshodi had tried to corner her car and overtake her she didn’t curse him out under her breath or give him a typical Juachi-type look, she just smiled and let him pass. Clearly, Tega was responsible for this niceness and butterflies- in -tummy feeling. She had had a spring in her steps all day.

Tega had already come out of the British Airways terminal and was with his luggage in front of the terminal waiting for her, she smiled as soon as she saw him, came out of the car and jumped on him. She hugged him tightly taking in all of the Armani code scent into her senses and feeling all warm and fuzzy inside, he kissed her, they stood there kissing for some minutes until someone behind her car horned for her to get in the car and move her car out of the loading and unloading zone.

“Na Wa oh!! Madam abeg make una carry all these lovey lovey reach house abeg, this na airport oh…hia! Other people one waka commot this place too…. Shuo??!!

Juachi pulled away to go move her car and Tega pulled her back to him,

“Let them wait” he whispered kissing her again and again, from her lips to her ears to her neck, she melted in his arms again despite the numerous cars horning for them to move. This was one reason why she loved this man, he was the first men she had met that wasn’t afraid of PDA, all the others acted like it was some terrible abnormality to do PDA and that didn’t go down well with her.

“Haha...babe you wouldn’t want them to tow my car now, would you... we’ll finish this up at home” she winked at him.

They got his luggage into the car, and they drove off. There was no traffic that evening; Juachi said a silent thankful prayer to the heavens, she just couldn’t wait for them to get home. They talked about his trip and laughed at the random things Tega said every now and then on the drive back to his house.

When they finally got home, she cooled the wine and they opened it, toasted to their love and drank, then he brought out her gifts, the $1200 professional SONY camera she had always wanted, Christian Louboutin leather and lamb skin caramel colored 4-inch pumps that she had showed him online one day while he looked on absentmindedly, she didn’t even know he would get it! She had just showed him one of those days and told him how they were the hottest things for feet this season. And as usual, he bought her favorite things, perfume and chocolate!!! She was ecstatic. Beaming like a child.

Tega opens up one box of chocolate and starts feeding her, and then she starts feeding him, he whispers in her ear grinning “you know what they say about chocolate being one hell of an aphrodisiac”

“Oh I won’t be needing that tonight baby, I’ve got all the aphrodisiac I need right here with me”

And in one swift movement, he lifted her up as she wrapped her legs round his waist, kissed her and took her upstairs to the bedroom-- leaving his suitcases lying around still locked in the living room, the SONY camera, the Christian Louboutins, the still almost full bottle of red wine, the chocolate and the perfumes on the table-- their fingers still stained with chocolate.

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let me know what u think.

xx

Iphy.